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Fish Girl Take 2

I believe this rewrite has worked out the worst weaknesses of the previous draft. I’ve got a list of places to send it, along with my other ocean story, “Shimmers and Sea Stars,” so that’s part of my plan for tomorrow. I’m working the weekend so Thursday is going to be writing/marketing day, with a break to sand my new (old!) desk. I’m looking forward to having my new (antique) writing space, and promise to take a picture of it when it’s all set up in front of the window.

Below, an excerpt from the rewritten first scene of “Fish Girl and the Kapok Spirits.”
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Save the Words

Being a massive word-hound, I was incredibly tickled by this site when my brother sent it to me. (Many thanks, by the way!) http://www.savethewords.org/

I have so far decided that I need to find ways to use antipelargy (‘reciprocal or mutual kindness, the love of a child for a parent’), hirquitalliency (‘strength of voice’), and stibogram (‘a graphic record of footprints’).

And for other word-joy, I recommend A.Word.A.Day newsletter, delivered straight to your inbox courtesy of wordsmith.org

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Happy Tolkien’s and Cicero’s Birthday

Cicero was the bane of my years at Boston Latin–that man was better at hiding a main verb than any author I have ever met.  After surviving Latin 3H, I developed a grudging respect for him, and frankly highly recommend Imperium by Robert Harris as a fantastic novel which humanizes the great orator and even gives him a small amount of humor.

However, anyone who knows me knows that my love for JRR Tolkien is lasting, and deep, and immutable.  So I offer to you three of my poems which were directly inspired by his world of Middle Earth, and the formal cadences so beloved by his Elves.

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Progressing Swimmingly

The second draft of “Fish Girl and the Kapok Spirits” is going well, thanks to some very thoughtful comments from my raft of first-draft readers.  Apparently I need to get rid of some ‘and’s, some exposition, and punch up some of the drama in the key moments.  This is all extremely doable, so I’m feeling pretty good about it.  Editing is really tough for me, as I suspect it is for most authors.  I fall in love with a story the way it stands, and some of my favorite passages don’t neccessarily translate well out of my head and onto the paper, so I’m working on telling myself that the more I treat my short stories like my poetry, where each word has to carry more weight than its body size, the less it hurts to get rid of the ones that don’t carry their load.  “Fish Girl” was already a short work for me, so finding the excess and filling out the thin spots is a definite learning experience.

Also exciting news on the modern epistolary project with the delightful exDevlin.  I love collaborating with authors/friends whose style and creativity I admire, and I think this one is going to be a fascinating endeavor and hopefully a fairly unique concept.  Her Clara and my Ren have the skeletons of some wonderful characters, and it’s going to be a blast working with her to flesh them out, along with the world in which they live.  (I’m half-hoping to convince her to incorporate a little art into this project too, though that’s definitely a conversation for much further into the planning process.)   But the good news is that this project is getting off the ground, and looking like immense fun, so stay tuned.

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A Penny to Bury the Wren

I’ve always been fascinated and impressed by the way authors such as Susan Cooper or Lloyd Alexander borrow copiously from mythology and folklore, especially from the British Isles, and weave such fantastic stories from those bits and half-explained pieces, which become an entirely new set of myths.

One scene that I’ve returned to a number of times is the “Hunting of the Wren” from The Dark is Rising.  In that scene, Cooper describes a procession of boys with musical instruments and a branch-covered bier, upon which lies a wren which turns out also to be the Lady.  The Lady, in Cooper’s mythology as of that point in the series, is a benevolent, powerful but not invincible force for the Light, extremely aged even among the Old Ones, whose presence is feared and detested by the forces of the Dark.  The Hunting of the Wren scene occurs not long after she has exhausted her strength fighting against the Dark, and symbolizes her imminent return.  I’ve always wanted to know where that piece of lore originates.

Imagine my joy this week, then, while listening to the Clancy Brothers’ Christmas in my car, when I heard them singing “The Wren Song.”  There’s no reference to Cooper’s Lady, but there’s a lot about ‘the king of all birds’ and St. Stephen’s day, and soliciting pennies to bury the wren.  (Which sounds like ‘ran’ in this case, and I’m going to hope that’s the reason that I’ve never made the connection before now.)   It turns out there’s a pageant which happens mostly in Ireland with the “Wren Boys” on St. Stephen’s day, which is the day after Christmas.  (There are a couple of decent references in my delicious tags, under ‘research’ or ‘travel, I believe.)  I have decided I love this idea, particularly the pagan references to ‘the king of all birds,’ and will add it to my pile of references and ideas for the Fairy Tale Project.

Merry Christmas, All!

The Wren Song (2)

The wren, the wren, the king of all birds,
St. Stephen's day was caught in the furze,
Although he was little his honour was great
Jump up, me lads, and give hima treat.

cho: Up with the kettle and down with the pan
     And give us a penny to bury the wren.

As I was gone to Killenaule
I met a wren upon a wall,
Up with me wattle and knocked him down
And brought him into Carrick town.

Droolin, droolin, where's your nest?
'Tis in the bush that I love best
In the tree, the holly tree
Where all the boys do follow me.

We followed the wren three miles or more
Three miles or more, three miles or more,
Followed the wren three miles or more
At six o'clock in the morning.

We have a little box under me hand (arm),
Under me hand, under me hand,
We have a little box under me hand,
A penny a tuppence will do it no harm.

Missus Clancy's a very good woman
A very good woman, a very good woman
Missus Clancy's a very good woman
She gave us a penny to bury the wren.

From The Irish Songbook, Clancy Brothers and Tommy Makem
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Happy Jane Austen’s Birthday!

Whether you’re an Elizabeth, an Elinor, an Edward, or an Emma, (not to mention a Wickham, a Willoughby, or a Weston!), I wish you a happy Austen-day, where the clever have room to spar, the silly are given their due, and deserving gents (often with large estates) end up with lovely, sensible wives.

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Progress!

The first draft of “Fish Girl and the Kapok Spirits” is done and passed along to a few friendly but critical eyes for a look-see.  I am in that curiously optimistic state where I actually hope they have a lot to say about how it could be improved.  It is possible I have contracted some form of brain damage, but there it is.

For those of you at all curious about the setting of this short story, it’s set on St. John in the USVI, and there’s a great description of one of the central pieces of the story here, along with some great pictures.

Excerpt, “Fish Girl and the Kapok Spirits,” first draft completed by M.Winikates 12/16/08

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Coming home from skiing one day, Feb. 06

Road salt spattered on the windows,
masterpiece of winter graffiti,
cannot hide the blue outside.
Pale as robin’s egg it deepens as
it stretches to the cloud kissed
vaulted sky, dreaming in cold
benevolence on all of us,
buses and trucks, highways and signboards.

My gaze flies up the window,
soul follows, but I cannot reach
the sky outside—road salt reality
blocks my way.

My wings are bold as the sun-dark sky,
blue as the dreams of songbirds and
sea gulls, light as the crystals that
wisp overhead:

Open the window.

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The Mistimed Ones

This is an older poem of mine, for which I love the concept, but I don’t feel like the execution is all that good.  I like some of the phrasing, but it’s an idea I think I might need to revisit now that I have some distance on it, and rewrite to get the style the way I’d like it.  I sort of love the idea of trying to work in some subtle rhythmic structure and such, because even after a lot of work, free verse still can give me the heebie jeebies, and I think a tighter structure would suit this idea and this voice better.

The Mistimed Ones

Days pass.  You drive, you work, you eat.
Days pass.  You go forward, never looking back.
Days pass.  You do not see us, but we exist.

All around you, we, the mistimed ones
Born too early or too late, living
In the wrong era, living twice.

Old souls sit in cubicles and dream
of firelight and Fae-deep hills,
write ballads on computers.

New souls, meant for future, kinder worlds
Go to Hollywood or government
And find the world too narrow still.

You do not see us standing,
watching, cloaking ourselves in modern thought.
But all cloaks slip.  We know.
Days pass.  We notice, and we laugh.

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Current Writing Projects, Dec. 08

Short Projects:

1 children’s story ready to send to publications, “Shimmers and Sea Stars”

1 ya/adult dark fairy tale 7/8 written, “Fish Girl and the Kapok Spirits”

1 near-novella, complete and in editing, “Of the Green World”

Novels:

16 chapters of Dragon in the Hourglass written, end of the novel in storyboarding

DitH sequel, Worldcrossers, and Regency comedy of manners on the backburner, planning stages

Orphans (are they short? Long? We’ll see):

“Plain Jane”

The Modern Epistolary Romance Project – a joint project with the talented Nancy S.

The Fairy Tale Project (already including “Fish Girl” and several poems)

“Mr. Longfellow’s Chair” (children’s non-fiction)